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New Post 8/2/2008 5:35 AM
  poeticpiers
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Deadly Serious experimental form Comments please 
 
Deadly Serious
 
 
A thin and thready threnody
played by the winds on the phone wires.
An eerie haunting melody
regretting unfulfilled desires.
 
A lamentation which can steal
your joy in life and make you sad
 Enhance the miseries you feel
 
If you are wise you stop your ears
refuse to give in to your fears.
 
 If you do not you will go mad.
 
The lost souls carried on the wind
 
Are seeking victims constantly
 to join their ghastly company.
 
 To share in their unhappiness
and they can find them easily
In people who cannot express.
 
Their joy in life to anyone
 but wallow in their misery.
and in the end are left alone.
 A self fulfilling prophecy.
 
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New Post 8/2/2008 1:02 PM
  John
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Re: Deadly Serious experimental form Comments please 

Nice work, Ivor. I liked both the form and the story as well as the rhyme scheme. Great ending. I know a few people who fit the poem perfectly...of course I'm not one of them.

John

 
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